Zoey the singer!! YAY!!! I Love Zoey!

name: Zoey
gender: girl
age: 4 years
species: vampire/dire wolf
dad: Vampire
mom: Snowa
brothers: Lyric and Skip
'boyfriend': Shane

attitude: can be very talktive and outgoing. she is cheerful. she adores singing, and is amasing. she can't be closer to her brother's. she likes to hang with her dad, and go for walks with Luna. (also Drag's). she tries to be better than everyone else, but isn't bossy, mean, or snotty.

appearence: her eyes are a floresent purple. her muzzle and chest are pure snowy white. she has a white stomach, paws, nose, mane, and tail. her under coat is black. the insides of her ears are white and her ears are black dipped in red. looks alot like her father. she has vampire fangs, but never bites.

history: she was born to Vampire and Snowa. Vampire is a vampire, so she was born with tiny fangs. she was first to be born. when she was born and started walking, she started making this cute, singy sound. it sounded cute and cool. her brother, Skip, started dancing around. when they could older, and could speak, Lyric started telling her songs, and she would sing them, Skip would dance. At a very young age, they started going around a preforming to a small group. one day, when Zoey was about 2 years old, a small group of wolves came to listen to her. in that group was; Shane, Texchrix, Sasori, Luna,(not mine) Rouge, and Abigal. once Zoey and Shane met, it was immidiete love. they all became great friends. Zoey is still friends with them.

hobbies: singing, duh!

attack: 5/10
defense: 6/10
HP: 10/10

(sadly, Drag won't be on often, so half of her family will NOT be rping, unless I ask Drag if a can use them)

okay.
WAY TOO MANY SHES AND HERS.
Let's say I wrote a bio on.... an owl named bob.

His Name is Bob.

He is a boy.

He is white. He has black spots. He is stupid. He is dumb. He has brown flecks. He has....

C'mon!

BORING.

I died of boredom reading this.

((no offense, Ingy.))

Please rewrite it.... well, you don't just have too, but I'd like that.

Otherwise, it's nice.

HOLD ON! slow down, put the brakes on, Beye. you wanted that somewhere. and note, if you're looking at appearence and saying that, it's because I copied and pasted. and I looked at a pic. but I'll fix it.

EDIT: Beye, what am I suppossed to replace it with?

Real setences.

Beye, It's a bio! not a high school report!

Ing is right. this isnt some important school, project. as long as we have the important stuff, its fine. I do believe you said that to, bright. And besides. its supposed to be fun.
put it this way. as long as its legible, and not like this
"hi, my name is bob I am the top of my class I rock accept me!"

*puts on thick glasses, clicky shoes, and holds dictionary in arms.*
Ahem. The proper way to structure a sentence is to........


Yeah, I won't get into English-Teacher-Mode.
Brighty DOES have a point....but, so do you two. This isn't an English paper. But, at the same time, I know several teachers who'd faint reading that.
Just, when the time comes to write it again and you're stuck(which, reading that, I'm getting vibes from it that shout WRITER'S BLOCK), just remember that you can use "Her""She has" and her name. And, you could combine the sentences, so you have less beginnings to think up.

The beginnings of a sentence are always the worst part for me, but recently, I'm able to be more creative.

As far as having everything it should, this bio is A-O-K. But as far as sentece structure......*keels over sideways*
JK! It's seriously not that bad. But, yea, you get the pic.

I say it's worthy of acceptance, but obviously we need to wait for a pass from Beye. I don't want her to get mad at us or anything.

lol, English teather mode. gotta wait for BEye! Beye!

Hai.

so, can I approve it?

Go head. But fix it first.

I already explained it Beye. I have major writers block, I don't understand what you mean, and it's not like writing a school essay.

I mean begin with better things.

look, I know you hate Zoey ALOT. and I have really bad writers block.

Ing....I don't think she's going to budge. So stop and think for a bit, and just replace, like, 5 of the beginnings with something else. Or combine the sentences.
Easy Peasy Lemon Squeezy.

Give it a try, it won't waste that much time.

*irretated sigh* is that good? I sortened it because I had to take some she's out, but is it good now?

Approve then.
btw can I steal your avvie and put it on WW?

no. my Konni.

darn he''s just soooooooo cute!

Well TOO BAD!!!

*sobbing*